“You were the one who was surprised you liked it”
"You were the one who was surprised you liked it"
What is it about this sentence that makes it sound clumsy?
I'm not sure about specific grammatical rules that should be applied to this sentence, or if there is simply a more elegant way to express the meaning here.
The intention of the sentence being that:
Roger recalls that Susan recently tried banana muffins for the first time and liked them.
Susan suggests presently that Roger is a fiend for banana muffins and can't eat enough banana muffins.
Susan says to Roger: "You do like your muffins, don't you dear."
Roger would like to remind Susan that she too liked banana muffins, maybe even more so than she would care to admit.
Roger says to Susan: "You were the one who was surprised you liked them".
grammaticality sentence
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"You were the one who was surprised you liked it"
What is it about this sentence that makes it sound clumsy?
I'm not sure about specific grammatical rules that should be applied to this sentence, or if there is simply a more elegant way to express the meaning here.
The intention of the sentence being that:
Roger recalls that Susan recently tried banana muffins for the first time and liked them.
Susan suggests presently that Roger is a fiend for banana muffins and can't eat enough banana muffins.
Susan says to Roger: "You do like your muffins, don't you dear."
Roger would like to remind Susan that she too liked banana muffins, maybe even more so than she would care to admit.
Roger says to Susan: "You were the one who was surprised you liked them".
grammaticality sentence
edited 1 min ago
Kris
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There's no grammatical error. For what is intended to be conveyed, the you in "you liked them" is inconsistent/ semantically incorrect. The sentence better be rephrased. (Suggestions on rephrasing are OT, btw.)
– Kris
2 mins ago
add a comment |
"You were the one who was surprised you liked it"
What is it about this sentence that makes it sound clumsy?
I'm not sure about specific grammatical rules that should be applied to this sentence, or if there is simply a more elegant way to express the meaning here.
The intention of the sentence being that:
Roger recalls that Susan recently tried banana muffins for the first time and liked them.
Susan suggests presently that Roger is a fiend for banana muffins and can't eat enough banana muffins.
Susan says to Roger: "You do like your muffins, don't you dear."
Roger would like to remind Susan that she too liked banana muffins, maybe even more so than she would care to admit.
Roger says to Susan: "You were the one who was surprised you liked them".
grammaticality sentence
edited 1 min ago
Kris
32.7k541119
asked 5 mins ago
teebszetteebszet
393
"You were the one who was surprised you liked it"
What is it about this sentence that makes it sound clumsy?
I'm not sure about specific grammatical rules that should be applied to this sentence, or if there is simply a more elegant way to express the meaning here.
The intention of the sentence being that:
Roger recalls that Susan recently tried banana muffins for the first time and liked them.
Susan suggests presently that Roger is a fiend for banana muffins and can't eat enough banana muffins.
Susan says to Roger: "You do like your muffins, don't you dear."
Roger would like to remind Susan that she too liked banana muffins, maybe even more so than she would care to admit.
Roger says to Susan: "You were the one who was surprised you liked them".
grammaticality sentence
grammaticality sentence
edited 1 min ago
Kris
32.7k541119
asked 5 mins ago
teebszetteebszet
393
edited 1 min ago
Kris
32.7k541119
asked 5 mins ago
teebszetteebszet
393
edited 1 min ago
Kris
32.7k541119
edited 1 min ago
Kris
32.7k541119
edited 1 min ago
Kris
32.7k541119
32.7k541119
asked 5 mins ago
teebszetteebszet
393
asked 5 mins ago
teebszetteebszet
393
asked 5 mins ago
teebszetteebszet
393
393
There's no grammatical error. For what is intended to be conveyed, the you in "you liked them" is inconsistent/ semantically incorrect. The sentence better be rephrased. (Suggestions on rephrasing are OT, btw.)
– Kris
2 mins ago
add a comment |
There's no grammatical error. For what is intended to be conveyed, the you in "you liked them" is inconsistent/ semantically incorrect. The sentence better be rephrased. (Suggestions on rephrasing are OT, btw.)
– Kris
2 mins ago
There's no grammatical error. For what is intended to be conveyed, the you in "you liked them" is inconsistent/ semantically incorrect. The sentence better be rephrased. (Suggestions on rephrasing are OT, btw.)
– Kris
2 mins ago
There's no grammatical error. For what is intended to be conveyed, the you in "you liked them" is inconsistent/ semantically incorrect. The sentence better be rephrased. (Suggestions on rephrasing are OT, btw.)
– Kris
2 mins ago
add a comment |
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There's no grammatical error. For what is intended to be conveyed, the you in "you liked them" is inconsistent/ semantically incorrect. The sentence better be rephrased. (Suggestions on rephrasing are OT, btw.)
– Kris
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